Making our stories Interesting.

We are learning how to make our stories interesting. I learnt how to add more information to my stories. I found it hard to add sound words. Next time I wound like to try this again

Looking out the car window I could finally see the beach. The ocean sparkled from the sun. My sister was sitting on the sand.

 “Boo” I shouted at my sister.

 “Argh!” she screamed “Danielle don't scare me."

 I gave my sister a huge hug. I hadn’t seen her for weeks. Mum walked over with a bag of towels.

 I said “Race you to the water.”